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Like the silk of a milk-weed tassel
Her silver hair whips in the wind
Frayed ends of her handkerchief dancing
Against neckline of frail, pallid skin

Her eyes, still bright in their sockets
Under mantles of loose, creased flesh
Store chroma tone photos and memoirs
Behind bastions of ivy mesh

Tomorrow, she値l dance in the daisies
And perhaps remember you not
In the golden flash she値l be living
She may revert to an innocent tot

Today she might think you're her sibling,
Tomorrow her mother or child
Perhaps she will hate you for coming
And her temper may detonate wild

Or the day will glisten with blessings
And she値l remember the love that you share
She値l revere you and thank you for coming
Conceding your sweet, gentle care

Then you値l tuck her into her blankets
As she smiles with blissful delight
While you kiss her on velvety forehead
And lovingly turn out the light

Felicia Stone ゥ February 19, 2010



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Here, I share, with stark honesty, my life.


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The following comments are for "Bastions of Ivy Mesh"
by FeliciaStone

Altzheimers scourge!
I love this Felicia...this dreaded disease is so cruel...and no one is immune! No matter how intelligent you may be, you are no match for this deadly intruder!!

Thank you for this.
Bea

( Posted by: Beatrice Boyle [Member] On: February 25, 2010 )

beautiful with one hiccough
I loved the lyrical quality of this poem.

I did falter with the placement of words to facilitate rhyme in this stanza -

Today you might be her sibling
Tomorrow her mother or child
Perhaps she will hate you for coming
And her temper may detonate wild

I believe you would be able to revise this to adjust the awkward rhyme.

( Posted by: Pen [Member] On: February 26, 2010 )

Bastions of Ivy Mesh
Thanks for commenting and for your support.

Pen... yes, there's always room for improvement. I tend to post long before perfection (if indeed it is ever achieved). I will be revisiting it, I'm sure.

Thanks again!

( Posted by: FeliciaStone [Member] On: February 28, 2010 )





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