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1/7/10

When we kiss you kiss your lover,
I kiss goodbye, both look too sweet;
Adjourn that which makes you hover,
That lip which makes you hover.

Gone are the days of our feats,
Gone, too, the words whispered in lust,
Now when I hear your warm entreats,
Gone is want for your heaving bust.

Remember you? But only by
Your dark, tossing, curled hair,
The scent which closed and dreamed my eye;
Remember my unsteady stare.

Biting me, yet vile to him,
How can I remorse over you
When passions would always burn dim,
And you to be forever untrue?



I know this is a response poem which is listed under my Day 7; I liked it more than what I have written for that day.


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The following comments are for "The Way I Kiss"
by mj20300

Kiss
Last word of the last line of the first stanza is supposed to be beat.

( Posted by: Mj20300 [Member] On: February 21, 2010 )

MJ
Good to see you back at it, my friend. We had so many responses to the 30 day challenge you proposed and in the end, I was the only one that came through. So, I am glad you are back! I hope to take on the same challenge again in a few months.

( Posted by: pablowilliams [Member] On: February 22, 2010 )

pablo
I was extremely excited about it too. Modern technology is useless sometimes(not sure if you saw the note to my other poem) but it was either my internet or my computer that didn't work. If all goes well, I'll my challenge poems continually. As far as taking the chalenge on again, I would love to!

( Posted by: mj20300 [Member] On: February 22, 2010 )

THE WAY I KISS
I am so thrilled that this is the product of your imagination! I love this and since I sparked you with my poem THE WAY WE KISSED I think it is only fair that you know you sparked mines so I wrote another one hopefully it will post tommorrow! I love this poem it his HOT! Good work-

( Posted by: DBurke [Member] On: February 22, 2010 )





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