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If we could chose our loves
and leave their cast off hulls
among the logged out tines of our years,
circadian memories, then a flight in the wind,
would I remember one of many?

If we should bridge the stars
and the Sun a memory of a memory
or watch the continents drift through spreading waves,
our loves in centuries, if we choose,
would I remember one of many?

If we filled our memory stores
jar upon jar of imaged wine
and raw tastes of yesterday
yet un-flushed by future lives,
would I remember one of many?

If we see the mountains end,
Eiger silenced to a gentle rise
from a fog-mottled moor,
tuned to the harsh notes of the love song of the loon,
Would I remember one of many?

I found my loves aplenty,
fire flies burning on a summer night.
Would I remember one of many?
But yes, there is a single song
that lives in every crevice, every corner
and rises with every passage.

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The following comments are for "Eons"
by r1067r

Far from technical. Very cool. Had the feel of the romantic in it. Great word choices and form. Good job!

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: February 18, 2010 )

While this is more of an artistic write - so to speak - it didn't grab me as much as the wheelchair poem which was exactly why I decided to read another post of yours. You have the bones to present a variety of styles which is never a bad thing.

( Posted by: Pen [Member] On: March 31, 2010 )

Well I really liked the way you used words here. At first I had trouble getting into what you were saying but then it hit me and I had to re-read it again and I felt the eons... the declaration of 1 love hidden in with the acceptance of mortality as opposed to an eternal life and wondering if it would be a meaningful, then declaring yes! Nice job.

( Posted by: nauticus66 [Member] On: April 8, 2010 )

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