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Driving down Chester Ave-
20 feet to stop at the
red light-

to my right side,
the lady was slender
and tall,
nice ass,
amazing breasts-

she was waiting to cross
the street.

Green means go-

I slow my vehicle-

softly on the road
next to her,

I conjuring up the words,
figuring out my steps,
daring my self,
as I timed my approach.

My phone rings,
its my Dad:

"What are you up to son?"

"Not much" I say,

"on my way home from work,

soaking in the wonderful weather..."

29 of 31 - 1/10

"Some people never go crazy. What truly horrible lives they must lead." — Charles Bukowski

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The following comments are for "Eternal Struggle"
by pablowilliams

the wonderful weather

which is sadly absent here today, but never mind. I enjoyed very much the juxtaposition of the title with the voyeuristic and laconic tone of the piece… induced a smile, this. thanks for sharing.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: January 30, 2010 )

Charming vignette, Pablo!
Loved this charming vignette...but it looks like Dad rained on your parade, Don Juan!

( Posted by: Beatrice Boyle [Member] On: February 1, 2010 )

LOL! Dude, your Dad is a bummer!

'Hey babe, how about...wait my Dad's on the phone.'
Made my Day!

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: February 4, 2010 )

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