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And your goldenrod locks fall
one by one to mine
naked shamed hand, ecstacy

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The following comments are for "Miranda Haiku"
by Robert Walker

"goldenrod locks "
is a lovely expression, and for that alone I’m a fan of this piece…

a good haiku, though, is all about balance, and you do that well by introducing the element of “shame” in to the delicious sensual abandon… that last line gives piquancy to the whole. deftly done. very nice indeed.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: January 26, 2010 )

thank you
Thank you Auld. Her hair really is goldenrod, so it was just observation, in meter too. lol
Thanks for the compliments

( Posted by: Robert Walker [Member] On: January 26, 2010 )

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