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The Universe has spoken

Did you hear her gentle whispers

Gentling touching your soul

Listen

There she is again

Listen, my child

For she has given you guidance

Your prayers were answered

Listen and remember

Faith

Hope

Love!


sunshineangel


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by sunshineangel

Universe
The only thing I would say about this, other than its wonderful, is I would take a look at the repetition of the word gentle. You already said that the whispers were gentle and so there is not need to say that they are "gently touching your soul. Just my humble opinion, other than that, I thought it was beautiful. Nice work my friend!

Much Love Dave

( Posted by: HeRoCoMpLeX [Member] On: January 22, 2010 )

@ HeRoCoMpLeX
I'm glad that you liked it my friend. Always appreciate your comments.

( Posted by: sunshineangel [Member] On: January 23, 2010 )





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