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You are misguided
The slaves pace
To modern culture

I am risen arterial ash
Revamped to better living
With dirty souled eyes
Cutting space and time

See scenic scared glimpses
Of my karma
Know that I'll be back

It's been better
Still flawed
Divided by illusion
Driven nails
Pulled from foundations

Masked and anonymous
I know you
I've been the whole world
And now only exist as truth

Existence as it should be
will be
can be and is currently
Will set the world on it's feet

Abused and tortured
Angry at sporty thieves
Breaking spirit drives
To hold down creation

Supporting fraudulent bypasses
Keeping all their power
From falling
Into the hands of change

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The following comments are for "Spirit Drives"
by mason

"risen arterial ash"
quite a picture you paint, a dystopian fire-and-brimstone vision with some cleverly crafted phrases, giving a rapid, snowballing cadence well suited to poem’s theme…

not sure if the quasi-prophetic full frontal attack is a style that sits comfortably. ;) it’s melodramatic, almost, but arresting nonetheless. enjoyed.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: January 19, 2010 )

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