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I'm your one-way street,
a light far off from
your dark heart-
waiting for days now.

In the beginning,
now as you end me,
closing curtains-

no audience.

Painfully savoring
our yesterdays,
I hope that today
you will come back to me-

I'm your one way street,
your bright light-

so I thought.

15 of 31- 1/10

"Some people never go crazy. What truly horrible lives they must lead." — Charles Bukowski

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The following comments are for "Her name is, Gwenivere"
by pablowilliams

"so I thought"
know that feeling lately. but the less said about that probably the better…

this is a wonderfully understated poem. its statements on emotional disillusionment are not wallowing of melodramatic but stark, blunt and almost terse, with only the final lines allowing a vulnerability to suffuse the whole…

beautifully orchestrated emotional theatre.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: January 20, 2010 )

closing curtains
Good stuff, nothing to add or anything, just good work. Loved it!

( Posted by: HeRoCoMpLeX [Member] On: January 21, 2010 )

Her Name
I like it too! ;)

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: January 21, 2010 )

Her name
Me tooo - liked it!

( Posted by: sunshineangel [Member] On: January 23, 2010 )

Friends, thank you!!

( Posted by: pablowilliams [Member] On: January 24, 2010 )

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