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One boulder smolders in the rain,
orphaned on a beaten beach coast.
A murmur burns, incites delay;
still, it sustains its fire's flame.

The grains of sand mere mirrors,
of infinite insanity;
repeats regrets of man's misdeeds,
which prevail and pale through time.

While wild horses spur on the mount,
a whispering wind tries to cry;
the boulder cracks and splits, a bit;
then, turns to two, three, four and five.

Cold holds tight in the black of night;
secrets unfold across the globe,
in a burly birthing of life.
There's no blame in the fire's rain

Beauty's a muse muted in waste
while mediocrity commands;
--for mortals are what mortals are--
no more, no less through time's caress.



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The following comments are for "FIRE'S RAIN"
by MTMarshall

Fire's Rain.
Very well done Miriam...so insightful.

Reminds me of "what fools we mortals be!"

Happy New Year!
Bea

( Posted by: Beatrice Boyle [Member] On: December 31, 2009 )

FIRE'S RAIN"
Thank you so very much Bea....I am truly pleased. I've been still having an issue with the last word but for now I will leave it..

Have a glorious New Year!!!!

Xxx
Miriam

( Posted by: MTMarshall [Member] On: December 31, 2009 )

Fires rain
Wow! This is terrific. A different voice form you and as poetically lucid as you have ever written here. The third stanza I loved. And the forth distills context of the poem wonderfully. Wow!
Good job!

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: January 2, 2010 )

FIRE'S RAIN
Thank you very much. The last line has given me a headache....I am still not sure of it...I may change it to: "no more no less throughout all time".

Still not sure though so I will leave it for now. ....

Hope you've had a wonderful new year my friend....All the best to you and your family...

Fondly,
Miriam

( Posted by: MTMarshall [Member] On: January 2, 2010 )





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