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Hand in hand they run
Grass above their heads
Lost in a world
Of a seven year old’s
Fantasy

Summer heat hangs thick
Sweat clings hair to her face
Sweat clings a shirt to his back
Cicadas chirp and butterflies flutter
Still lost in the world
Of a seven year old’s
Fantasy

Under an oak tree they sit
Gasping for air that eludes them
A lollipop is revealed from his pocket
A smile dances on her lips
They take turns enjoying the taste
Sharing lollipop kisses
Forever lost in the world
Of a seven year old’s
Fantasy



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The following comments are for "Lollipop Kisses"
by Kayame

oh my...
I love this!!

( Posted by: pablowilliams [Member] On: December 22, 2009 )

nice
very visual, very nice i liked this one

( Posted by: johntellall [Member] On: December 23, 2009 )

Sweet
I got lost in it, too.

( Posted by: poeteye [Member] On: January 3, 2010 )





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