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I join the queue along the gray building, with all the other gray faces, on this gray winter's morning.
We're in single file. All is calm at the moment.
Some are clever and have brought a newspaper. Frustrated middle-aged men study the racing pages, hoping to make more of their pittance. A rough single mother flicks through a gossip rag, only occasionally looking up to shoot daggers in the direction of younger, prettier women.
Some are new to the dole queue. Honest and intelligent professionals bear the brunt of the pain, as swindling executives stroll away with golden handshakes. They stare at the ground embarrassed and avoid eye contact with others.
You may even see some unemployed college graduates reading soft-back novels. This recession is merely a delay for them; they have time on their side. Young, vibrant and educated they stand out among the crestfallen.
They're yet to experience the hardship. I take out my mp3 and scroll through the list of artists for appropriate music, until a big empty battery flashes before me and the screen fades to black.
My heart sinks.

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The following comments are for "Abject Dole"
by tommy

Lucid! But I had a hard time reading this as poetry - mostly because I don't know where I am to breath/beat or stop. I have this conversation a lot - using proper form does not diminish you as a poet. It allows the reader to read the piece as you intend.
Thanks for the post.

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: December 19, 2009 )

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