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She approached me earlier today-
normally she wakes me in the middle
of the night.

It seems that I have work to do;
she always has the right words,
the right angles-
her dreams are much
more vivid than mine and require
less words.

I don't know how she does it,
but I am to blame-
my delivery is off aim,
tattered,borderline useless.

She uses a figurative sword to slice
up my insides-
tearing at me with little empires
of daggers.

Sometimes I wish that she would
just take the pen from me
and write it herself.

she creeps and crawls,
plotting and attacking my thoughts,
my actions-

wearing me out,
waiting for the right time
to make her get away.

I have often suggested that she just leave.
I remind her of the times when

she used to love me-
She would wake me in the night
just to point out the blackness
of the night and then make love to me.

She used to dance with me,
claiming that moon beams made up our steps.

But no longer is she with me-
void of words to tell,
she meshes reality with her dreams
and I am unable to make sense of it.

"Some people never go crazy. What truly horrible lives they must lead." Charles Bukowski

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The following comments are for "She inside of me II"
by pablowilliams

Inside me
My friend I have no idea what this means but I really like it! I feel if I could alter my mind a bit it will all fall into place.

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: December 16, 2009 )

She is so sexy
I am a vehicle for her- she guides my pen. She is unlettered but then she is not- she is so alive inside of me but I can never catch her. Seductive, persistent, so tempting is she. I almost hate her!

Glad you really like it!! As always, thank you good friend!!

( Posted by: pablowilliams [Member] On: December 17, 2009 )

Of muse and musings
Enjoyed experience..


( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: December 20, 2009 )

Oh Muse...
I think I called her deaf and dumb at one point and a merciless bitch at another, I feel your pain my friend. Great work!!! I really enjoyed this.

Much Love,


( Posted by: HeRoCoMpLeX [Member] On: December 21, 2009 )

Don't we all have her?
She's a non-committal bitch alright! Which is why I'm keeping my day job. Very entertaining :-D

( Posted by: Ari [Member] On: December 23, 2009 )

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