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Stand tall, stand tall! My friend, my jay,
Through this sorrow and despair;
Stand tall through lands unmapped,
Stand tall through late, extended play-
By which, unconscious, all pay fare-
When lines rehearsed tonight lapped.

Do not shed dry involuntary tear
For that which is already drenched,
Nor fathom that which is already known;
How far fly arrows shot in fear,
Or winter's clothes in summer, wrenched,
Or a bee, stung, tomorrow stung?

Stand tall against injustice weary,
It isbut a wild, hunry cub
Which must be tamed by common sense;
How do I name traits clearly
Seen in aspect, mind, and grace? Hub!
Hear not the voice, it got its cents!

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The following comments are for "Stand Tall"
by mj20300

Stand tall
OHHHH! There is something wonderful here but it doesn't quite gel. 1st stanza was cool- bent word meaning a bit - but I like that.2nd Stanza 1st Verse maybe 'tears'. Last verse maybe 'Or a bee, stung, tomorrow's sting?' otherwise my favorite stanza. Last stanza 1st verse maybe 'wearily'. I didn't get the allusion's conclusion -Sorry! ;)- in the last line. Cents?
Aside from my nit picking, on this one, you are a heck-of-an- inkslinger. I always look forward to your next post.
Bless you.

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: December 14, 2009 )

Firstly, thank you for your posts, as always. I got snubbed! If you had not read this and noticed it, I would have let it go. In stanza two I used tears instead of tears because I wanted this person to know that whatever they were going through should not worry them but since it does shed only one tear instead of several. In the line, "Or a bee, stung, tomorrow stung" that second stung is actually supposed to be "gone" to rhyme with the word "known" to mean that today's pains are nothing tomorrow much as a bee dies after it stings and nobody remembers it anymore. In my haste to post I didn't proof read, some poet/writer I am :-(. The last line I could tweek but as I was writing what was running through my mind was a beggar harrasing you for change and upon refusing yells obscenities but once you give them some small change they leave you alone; as the poor are viewed as none entities and people generally don't take into consideration what they have to say I was trying to parrallel harshness to non importance with beggars asking for change, if that makes sense?

( Posted by: mj20300 [Member] On: December 14, 2009 )

In my above comment I meant to say tear for the first tears. I should stop writing immediately!

( Posted by: mj20300 [Member] On: December 14, 2009 )

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