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Let me be among the shadows alone
For love has brought me nothing warm to hold
Apart from all my eyes have ever known
Tossing aside in me all once held bold
If only it could not hurt me again
The shadows would not be my bitter end
I would not feel so slain by your disdain
There'd be no need to either mend nor tend
Love would then be my true friend, not my foe
Nor my sulky heart embittered by this loss
Soaked here in frozen dreams of hardened snow
Petrified by the warmth I lost, my cross
If arms would only hold me kind not blind
Warming me each day I'd be sound in mind




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The following comments are for "Sound In Mind"
by MTMarshall

sound
Pretty cool. The rhyme pattern here is a tough one to maintain, without sounding forced, but you did a great job. Thanks
Bless you!

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: December 19, 2009 )





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