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Come back to me, come back to me,
Those sweet hours of seclusion,
When you and I sat side by side,
Under intruding stars who see
Through My friendship tied illusion,
And spring's scent in summer hide.

Can I ignore your rosing blush
When I retracted spoken cheers
Must whisper to your sleeping ear?
Can I ignore your reposed lush
When vitals break upon your tears
As you express your hidden fear?

So mellowed sat we on those steps,-
Receding back the stare of night-
All first light passed through your eyes
And through the shades' above missteps;
The tresses dark encompassed light
And gently soothed that brow, in plies.

As thus we sat-the night reclining-
How can I write but feel that stare,
The way it lit me up and down,
Then by chance that we should meet, declining,
And the gentle heaving of your hair
Birth dreams in me, amidst life sown?

I dreamt my dreams reality,
Of half weary, pensive starlights
Gently gazing from my breathing
Into mine, nursing vanity.
Those idle dreams of half-fought fights,
Which by you are joy now leaving.


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The following comments are for "Come Back to Me"
by mj20300

come back to me
My friend you have a gift for speach that I am envious of. This was beautiful. Your word usage is thought provokeing and insightful. Wonderful piece this.

Much Love,

Dave

( Posted by: HeRoCoMpLeX [Member] On: December 9, 2009 )

Come back
Very nice. You did what I attempted to do in 'Love' but collapsed under the weight of my own verbiage. This is balanced, sweet, searching, and lucid. I too love your word mastery. High language and a charming poetic voice. Thank you for this. Good job.

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: December 10, 2009 )

MJ20300
Your word use is exciting, provoking desire and fond memories all at once. Excellent use of words- undeniably skill here. Awsome!

( Posted by: pablowilliams [Member] On: December 10, 2009 )

Great Poem
Great poem_love the way you use words its indeed a gift!

( Posted by: DBurke [Member] On: December 11, 2009 )





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