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You preach conformity as insight
Not allowing for anything outside
Your rules
That stagnate the flow to my channel

Dress me in a string tie
Ask for that shuffle
Cold hearted
I won't dance

You mistake pride for arrogance
To read your notes of merit
I know you

The foolish follow blindly
My opposition is displayed
A balled fist of frustration

How dare me
How dare you
Ask me to change
Who I am

For what
For a response
To move the masses
To answer their prayers
In song

Insight shouldn't have to be
Manipulated to make it

I shouldn't have to
Hold their hand
For a wake up call
To the unproductive
I scream hoarsley

Put me in the sandbox
I will beat them
With their own stale bread

I will spit your world
Your rules
Your desire
To package neatly
Back at you

I don't do this for
Or them

I knew you wouldn't understand
I knew it would be corrupted
I knew it couldn't last
I wish they could hear
I'd hoped that you would see

This is me
Standing tall
In the eye of the storm

This is my challenge
To the thunder's cry
You will not move me

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The following comments are for "Saga of Frustration"
by mason

Religion or Doctrine
frustration toward a belief system?

"For what
For a response
To move the masses
To answer their prayers
In song"

Healthy with anger and frustration, even determination, I just can't gather to whom or what....Thick as a rock, I am at times.

( Posted by: pablowilliams [Member] On: November 29, 2009 )

response to pablo
I find it interesting that you found the work to insinuate a conflict between myself and the church. I have a cousin that studied theology and he came to the same conclusion after reading it. He had a problem of that nature and the work stirred up feelings he had on the issue, bringing me to the point.
I believe that an individuals response to a work is the gift. To divulge what or whom was the inspiration for me writting this would influence an individuals interpretation, and thus take away from the work as a whole.
I truly appreciate your comment and interest. I also enjoyed your work Selma Please and confess to being a big Bjork fan as well.

( Posted by: mason [Member] On: November 29, 2009 )

I guess that is reason enough to back off- interpretation does lend to the mystic of the poet. Although,I do have to say that for many of the great poets (Whitman,Pounds,Lorca, ezra)knowing their background help to in rich further the experience of reading their poetry. Also, if you aspire to the point of view, as you have presented- leaving it completely up to interpretation-that raises the poets responsibility to secure definitively, the line of thought, making sure every word is chosen correctly, punctuation etc.- presenting your secreative Ideas with full account, and always ready for those far out there interpretations- which you are sure to have.

Wonderful response though.

Byork- amazing indeed.

Keep spilling blood my friend and I look forward to more of your writings- put my interpretive skills to the test.:)

( Posted by: pablowilliams [Member] On: November 29, 2009 )

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