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Side effects are things
that we really don't need.
they come with the things we want
like gardens come with weeds.
Everything has a side effect,
no need in me lying,
even living has a side effect,
we refer to it as dying!
A pill that makes you stop one thing
will make you start another
and the quickest way to gain an enemy,
is to turn a friend into a lover.
It's difficult to believe
that love has side effects,
that it's occasional use
could leave your life a wreck!
It seems so benign,
so innocent, so pure.
Yet most who have tried it
have been made to endure,
the most horrible, sickening kind of pain.
The kind that makes you think about
putting a bullet through your brain.
I just can't understand,
nor comprehend the reason why,
the thing that makes you laugh,
will also make you cry.
I guess that's the way
life was meant to be.
giving and taking
and balancing Chi.
For those who do not know,
Chi is energy.
The building blocks
of all we see.
this and that, and you and me.
Whenever we take something,
we must give in return.
Keeping everything in balance,
is the lesson we must learn.
For every cause there is an effect.
Sometimes it's general,
and sometimes direct.
The one thing that is for sure
and of this there is no doubt;
the delicate art of balancing Chi,
is what life is all about.

------
Yetunde


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The following comments are for "Side Effects"
by MuddyBraun

Side effects
'The problem I have with chi
is where it is found in me
True there is cause and affect
On the choices I do elect
Those dichotomies that live in me
I am blessed that there is this chi' ;)

Wonderful teaching piece. I really enjoyed this one.
Bless you!

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: November 21, 2009 )

Clever
The rhythm in this is not overbearing- I like this.

( Posted by: pablowilliams [Member] On: November 21, 2009 )

For those who do not know
Yetunde,

Liked the subject matter and where it led to. The transistion between the two parts though clashed with me. The line 'for those who do not know' in a way then directs the reader that you are only talking to people who do not no what Chi is.

This line could be left out and the transition is smooth and acceptable to all and has even more effect as you are relating the first half of the poem to an explanation of the things you have discussed without this presumption.

Good content, interesting, a couple of hiccups in syllable rythm but nothing that deters from enjoying the read.

Ivor

( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: November 22, 2009 )





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