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This poem isn't really anything in perticular, just lines I jotted down as they were coming to me.

Which objects to life give
To grow, to thrive, and to exist,
From me but take away;
Those objects that not die in sleep,
Nor faint in day, nor by a bossom dwell
in infancy,
No love they give but sorrow leech,
And me they waste away;
The sun and moon, on see-saw swing,
Offer curtained hope, of brighter days
And loving nights; but as one sets,
To give the other rise, our hope shows
but shades of love,
A shade of age-of anguish
And of a loss in time-
That to not lose what once was
We must stride on, though it shall never
be again;
Our lives should be but one full day,
For sorrow never fades as joys creeps up
and disappears;
What does not age, ages me,
And that which does not tire, wears my feet
to bone;
If man had eternal life,
As rock, or stream, or cloud,
What would he accomplish?
A single bud yields constantly one flower,
But I shall never live again;
I am a force of habit,
What will my habit bring for me?




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The following comments are for "A Few Lines"
by mj20300

Look forward to it:
Work this out, could be great!

( Posted by: pablowilliams [Member] On: November 5, 2009 )

a 7, really??
that's being mighty generous, thanks :-)....agreed that it does need tweeking but i don't know if i'll come back to do it because it was just randomness that i was jotting down

( Posted by: mj20300 [Member] On: November 5, 2009 )

potential......other wise, why post it :)
Sometimes randomness yields snippets and morsels- wonderful ideas.... I see the potential indeed.

( Posted by: pablowilliams [Member] On: November 6, 2009 )

a few lines
Just as Pablo wrote so well. Good ideas just a few less well worked lines. ;)

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: November 6, 2009 )





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