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Storm clouds hung ominously over the city
all day long,
disconnected thunder punctuating the gloom;
sprawled on a bench after escaping the downpour,
observing humanity scurrying back and forth,
lightning on the black horizon.

An old man with a bad hip makes his way
slowly through the sweeping rain,
leaning heavily upon his cane;
illuminated in the asphalt mirror
by the parking lot's flood lights:
pulling the car around for his wife.

Thoughts turn to doom, our mortality,
unkind words spoken to a loved one,
a mother bravely trying to hide pain
from her child;
reliving moments over and over,
longing to return just once more.

But it's night time, now.

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The following comments are for "Night Time"
by verve

night time
Noir and richly painted. I loved this one - a multi-layered flash of life with a flash of lightening. Great imagery and theme. Yowwww! Very cool!

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: November 2, 2009 )

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