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Beauty's a gift best not given,
Nor is the act of hopeless tire
For a cup that is never full;
On those whose forehead gently press,
A single strand of lapsing thought,-
For in appearence Beauty's sought,
And hair should never be abject
As to cover that piercing gaze,
Unless nature seeks maneauver
To uphold its own appearence,
And gently tosses hair astreay;-
Uphold the countenance of zest,
While in secret, gently mourning,
They received the gift of envy,
And in return gave vanity.

Whom envy finds are also vain,
And those in vain are also proud,-
A scorching sword that's twice as sharp,
And of their defects doubly sore-
Be proud of modesty and live
Wihin the talents of your sou;
Happiness is a cup twice filled,
And thrice as rare as rarest gem.


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The following comments are for "On Beauty"
by mj20300

on beauty
Okay! I am officially a fan! I love the high toned approach and deep well-formed thoughts. Great!

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: November 2, 2009 )

A"Hairy" tale!
Love, love, love this mj! It's classical style is enchanting and rarely found in this modern literary world.

It's almost a shakespearian hair commercial if you will! Very inventive to say the least.

Beatrice Boyle

( Posted by: Beatrice Boyle [Member] On: November 2, 2009 )

Love your work...
Been following your work, though I rarely comment these days, and I must say I do really like your style. Keep them coming...good stuff, you have a natural flow and intensity within your works that I really like;-)

Tashi Delek!
Karma

( Posted by: TheRealKarmaTseringLhamo [Member] On: November 3, 2009 )

jonpenny, Beatrice Boyle, TheRealKarmaTseringLhamo
Thank you for your words. Is it normal for a writer to think his own works bad? My friends love it, but I think they're being too modest because they're friends of mine. Not that I think mine are horrendous, but after I finish writing a poem I still think it could use more or I should take something out. Most importantly, I believe they're missing passion and feeling, what Wordsworth called a "spontaneous overflow{of emotions}". What do you guys think? Too much love and Byron are bad for the head and soul! :=)) haha Thank you again

( Posted by: mj20300 [Member] On: November 3, 2009 )

every now and again
i check to see what the "most read poem" of the moment is...and this it. what a fine. it evokes some beautiful images and says so much in so few words. real fine work.

11/7/09

4:37pm

( Posted by: johnjohndoe [Member] On: November 7, 2009 )





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