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Silent without splash...
she swims like a ghost

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by dianahayes

Senryu genre?
But, I am confused, it is two double lines only? And it is 5 5 verses 5 7 5 or 3 5 3 or whatever combos there are out there, Bobby 7L is the Senryu expert of Lit.Org, I know very little about it, but I do know what I like, and this is interesting to me to say the least? Hm mm? I think this piece must have it's own the way, noticed you are an old time member, don't remember reading your work before though, welcome back;-)


( Posted by: TheRealKarmaTseringLhamo [Member] On: November 1, 2009 )

6 6
nope-not a 5 5 it is a 6 6 now I see this is simply a minimalist piece, pure. Fascinating;-)

( Posted by: TheRealKarmaTseringLhamo [Member] On: November 1, 2009 )

Thanks so much for your comments Karma. :~) I'm not following the rules of traditional haiku. Lots of modern haiku in English doesn't follow a particular structure such as 5-7-5...

( Posted by: dianahayes [Member] On: November 1, 2009 )

@ diana
Here again, will you explain further??

( Posted by: pablowilliams [Member] On: November 1, 2009 )

An interesting poem short and to the point. I kinda like it very interesting to me.

( Posted by: literature [Member] On: November 2, 2009 )

It's own genre...unique, simple, pure, no debate or explanation necessary... this case this is short verse, pure and simple...lovely really.. there is no debate or genre category to put it under other than haiku that would come close to what it "feels" like upon reading, nor is there a need to explain is one of those either you like it or you don't. Minimalist. Unique.

Keep them coming...

Tashi Delek!

( Posted by: TheRealKarmaTseringLhamo [Member] On: November 3, 2009 )

haikus or not
Past the opportunity to debate and clarify forms - which to me is always cool. I agree it's still nice work and Diana I'm glad you are here!

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: November 3, 2009 )

who cares for it
Style sucks :-). I liked this piece no matter which catergory you put this in. The best writers wrote outside of the norm. I wish I could be so punctual; nice.

( Posted by: mj20300 [Member] On: November 3, 2009 )

Haiku-ku For Caca
Annoyed I have become
now I must shoot someone

( Posted by: thetesticularprancer [Member] On: November 4, 2009 )

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