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I didn't lose you opening the door
shocked by wallpaper shadows
where our wedding pictures used to smile down
over the missing couch that saw nights curled
naked under cover watching g-rated movies
bought for kids it seems we'll never have.

I didn't lose you eating curry noodles
rehydrated in cardboard boxes
you'd say looked like a Catholic hat,
or when I realized I drink glass-less now,
straight from liters, jugs, and bottles
as couple courtesy folds inward to vanish.

I lost you by telephone, alone
all apologies dead on trembling lips
listening to the tin-can sound.
your Bluetooth voice telling me
"I'm not available, please leave a message"
I decline, because you already have.

Smile if you're stupid,
laugh if you understand.

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The following comments are for "I Didn't Lose You"
by Bartleby

Bartleby's back!
Hey Bart...soo good to see your avatar again...keep em coming...this was great!!


( Posted by: Beatrice Boyle [Member] On: October 24, 2009 )

I didn't lose you
Welcome back. Terrific piece. Words bristling on the raw end of a nerve. Thanks

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: October 26, 2009 )

really good, man
Sometimes we bring it back with the blood still on it.

( Posted by: johnlibertus [Member] On: May 31, 2010 )

Schadenfreude Express
Nothing like posting ones angst and suffering, for all the world (or at least the zombies that live here) to witness.

Nice way of slipping technology in there. Bluetooth voices everywhurrrrr.

( Posted by: BorderlineSchizophrenic [Member] On: June 10, 2010 )

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