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She took me in
When I was torn and tattered.
She took me in because
For her,
Love was all the mattered.

She took me in
When she was hardly awake.
She took me in
Then, she baked a cake.
She took me in
When life had given her
All that she could take.

She long, blond hair
Flowed almost down
To her perfect legs.
She held me close,
So I didn't have to beg.
Our love was stronger
Than the winter wind.
She took me in
Because she was done with him.

She took me in
And let me stay
More than one night.
She took me in
I was her reason for delight.


She took me in
Because for her,
Love was all that mattered.
She took me in
Though I was all torn and tattered.

She took me in
Because love was all that mattered.

Even to,
The torn and tattered.

Even to,
The torn and tattered.

Love was all that mattered.

------
Ronald Peter Ciras


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The following comments are for "Torn and tattered"
by moroccanron

Torn
Reads like a country song - and not bad that at all...but 'she baked a cake' really??? ;)

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: October 18, 2009 )

Funny
I like the line "she took me in when she was hardly awake."..its both funny and strangely erotic somehow..as is this one "she took me in because she was done with him."..a very intriguing character, this 'she'!

( Posted by: niel3995 [Member] On: October 20, 2009 )





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