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If it gives your heart
a change of mood
makes you part
some bad ways for good
Such words shall I write
till there are words no more
and my mind benumbs
to the blank slate before.

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The following comments are for "Slate"
by niel3995

Nice one
"words to write, till there is no more.." Feeling this! Except, I can never find them!!! :O

It is hard for me to find rhythm poetry that cuts deep; I love this.

( Posted by: pablowilliams [Member] On: October 18, 2009 )

Economic and lucid - but I kinda want some more. The last two lines are so frickin' good that I just think it deserves some more effort, lest those brilliant lines be forgotten,

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: October 18, 2009 )

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