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a beast once contained,
kept clean and pure by
the burning fire of God.

all could see me.

my open wounds,
never seen,
kept from the light,
kept from creation.

the flesh of a woman now-
seed to sprout death,
passion for
the cutting blade-

i am no longer a man,
but a wasted breath-
inward sin,
twisted by the very
seed of Eve.

with that waste
I now find company.

they go on speaking
and tickling the ears
of one another
slaughtering the unfamiliar
tones that never
erupted into the night sky.

that sky were love
is a verbal procession
of wonderment.

that place,
that place

that place were a
man can speak of his
soul and what
it yearns for.

I was once there,

but now,

I am no
longer alive.

"Some people never go crazy. What truly horrible lives they must lead." Charles Bukowski

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The following comments are for "Falling"
by pablowilliams

NIce!!! Open form- great word choices. I loved the way this one reads. A rocking piece.

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: October 15, 2009 )

Word Choice
"speaking and tickling the ears of one another" are so good in your word choice!!
(Though "that sky were love" and "that place were a man speak.." these two lines kind of confused me...)

( Posted by: niel3995 [Member] On: October 16, 2009 )

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