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How did this fall apart?
In a luminescent explosion
Of fireworks brilliance
We saw our youth reflected back
In irradiant mirrors of ingenuity

And what was the value
Of the fragmented pieces
That was every memory of laughter
Off set by fragments of beautiful bone
We blew it into belligerent oblivion

In the spaces between the seconds
There was an eerie silence
And the knowledge of life and death
Was at long last appreciated
Viewed in the iris of an eye



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Does the wadded up paper ball or the bowling ball fall faster?


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The following comments are for "Oblivious Crash"
by thesadpoet

Hmm...
I'm sorry, I zoned out. Forgot what I was going to say.

( Posted by: thetesticularprancer [Member] On: October 11, 2009 )

Growth
I sense growth with this piece. Only thing, you start off with a question, indicated by question mark. But, in the second stanza, opening line, is it intended as a question?? Also, first stanza reads "fireworks brilliance", I like the way "firework (no 's')brilliance" sounds. And instead of "That was" maybe: It was.

Overall, some growth to found in this. Thank you so much for sharing.

( Posted by: pablowilliams [Member] On: October 14, 2009 )





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