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The Following by Don mohr

My health was a blundering man of opinions,
Birthed in a closet of failed conditions
Typecast as followed, and therapeutically unravelled
useless, unauthorized and documented anti-social.
Treatments save lives from worry
Doctors worry about saving lives
lives of worried doctors need treatment too
The following of unhealthy men that are born
from empty closets, disclose much therapy to
Release the unauthorized documents
To this, they burn them.








D.E.M.-09




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D.E.M.


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The following comments are for "the following"
by Wetice

Hi
Good work, mate. Makes a good read, I like your rounding off line, 'to this, they burn them.' puts a definite full stop on it.

( Posted by: Ogg [Member] On: October 3, 2009 )

Agree with Ogg...
This does make for good reading indeed, good work.

Tashi Delek!
Karma

( Posted by: TheRealKarmaTseringLhamo [Member] On: October 3, 2009 )

The following
Just cool! Well written my friend.

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: October 4, 2009 )





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