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My bones are not yet dust
To rise up and fill the lungs
In an asphyxiating storm…


The neural atmosphere is ablaze

Wings of the New Phoenix
Carve ripples and waves
In its highest realms…

I reside,
Suspended
Plasmatic catatonia
Pulsating veins
Eyes rolled back

Electricity pours through the air
An ionized maelstrom;
Of ebb tide and moon wane
I can recall…


It is autumn in my soul
I expel this body with a sigh
Exhale and move on…


The bone chimes now emanate
Sounds much too dense
For the frail fabric of spacetime to endure

They fall through
Like waves of the sea

I am swept away in their melody…


Order and Symmetry
Recognized now as Chaos once more;

In Chaos I am home



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The following comments are for "Visions of September"
by ghostpoisonsturgeon

No appetizers for me thanks.
OUTSTANDING! I like poetry such as this because, instead of spending time crafting the words that help the main words weave themselves into a solid blanket of literary lovliness, ye get to the main course. NO APPETIZERS FOR YOU!

( Posted by: Robert Walker [Member] On: September 30, 2009 )

vision
Amazing! Stunning economy and clarity. Wow! Good job.

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: September 30, 2009 )





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