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This is for a dear friend:

He is torn
He loves her
But things are better
When they are apart

How do you justify
A divorce you donít want
But need?
What do you say?

It has been 5 years now
The separation seems endless
But he canít bring himself
To admit defeat

Is it really defeat if you
Both are to blame?
If it is best for those involved?
Best for the kids and grandkids?

He doesnít want to hurt anyone
But he doesnít want to hurt anymore
His loneliness is getting to be, what?
Too comfortable? No, just too constant

It is time to move on
To pick up the pieces
To see what is left
To offer someone else

Does anyone believe in love anymore?
This seems to be a resounding question.
And why is it that those who do
End up with those who donít?

But in the end, they end up alone.





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The following comments are for "Icicles, Not Tears"
by leftylink

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Complex thoughts in a simple, conversational voice and I would offer that an occasional question is a good poetic device -if it isn't over worked. That - in this poem almost to that point. Normally, I would offer that you should find a more poetic voice, but having written that, I have to tell you, this poem is important because it is simple and touches at a deeper level than the words present.

'He doesnít want to hurt anyone
But he doesnít want to hurt anymore'
I liked this!
Good job.

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: September 26, 2009 )





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