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*i am not a writer..really..i am just a creature that loves to fool around..and i am really touched by your comments..keep them coming..love you all.. this is a new one..*


it's a start..
maybe i'm still figuring out what i am
or maybe i'm just living my life
owning it..materializing from thin air

breaking out..
tasting the new shapter of this existence
singing to the tune of this song
trying to break free of the dark past?
convincing myself on believing
that finally..i am happy

happinness..
the smile that was glued on my face
my pretty face-they say
i don't believe them
how can someone so pretty be so vulnerable??
ba as fragile as a calm lake
maybe that's the way it is
and so..i don't care
because i am happy

the line was flat
sadness made my life exciting
and this happiness turns out to be boring
it rhymed!
a perfect juxtaposition..
whooooooww

someday..i'll be voicing out my new me
forgive me dearie this is all new to me
i'm still adjusting
and getting used to it
don't get me wrong

i am not trying to be happy
i am just coming out of my shell..
soon..
it won't be long

his arms..his heart
they are my cradle now
so why bother???

for i this is new
i am not sad anymore
and i am happy


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The following comments are for "a new begginning"
by angeli

Begin...again.....
Again you have outdone yourself. I enjoyed this, it had a playful attitude that I truly enjoyed. What is happiness? Are any of us really every happy? Questions I have asked time and again. This one really hit home for me.

One nit pick, what does juxtaposition mean? Was it a typo? If so, what was it trying to be, this really threw me out of the rythmn of this piece.

Thats just me being nit picky.....*in his best Wizard of Oz voice* "Pay no attention to that man behind the curtian!"

Love your work, keep scribling,

Dave

( Posted by: HeRoCoMpLeX [Member] On: September 11, 2009 )

@ Dave
Juxtaposition means placing two (or more) things side-by-side, or doing so in a metaphorical sense by relating them to or comparing them to each other.

( Posted by: Beckett Grey [Member] On: September 11, 2009 )

@Beckett
*Hangs head in shame*

And now the mask is off and everyone see's I'm just a dumb old redneck. :P

Generally when I come across a word I don't know I look it up so I don't feel so much like an idiot. However I thought I had this one pegged as a typo and didnt bother, *slaps hand and scold, "Shame on you!!!"*

Begging Angeli's forgivness,

Dave

( Posted by: HeRoCoMpLeX [Member] On: September 11, 2009 )

@ Dave
That's the problem with English. There's a lot of it, and sometimes it doesn't make much sense. Some languages borrow from other languages. English follows other languages into dark alleys, hits them over the head, then goes through their pockets for loose change.

And some of it just comes out of thin air. Shakespeare invented hundreds of new words. Just made them up when he needed one. I think you can be forgiven for missing *one* of them.

( Posted by: Beckett Grey [Member] On: September 12, 2009 )

=D
owkei..after a few days of writing my happiness..again..i am sad..=(
i'll be writing again soon..when i feel like doing so..

herocomplex "mr.superman"
i forgive you

beckett grey..=D thanx

juxtaposition is pairing of the opposites..
i learned it from my literature1 class, back in my UST days..

luv you all

( Posted by: angeli [Member] On: September 13, 2009 )





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