Lit.Org - a community for readers and writers Advanced Search

Average Rating

(0 votes)

You must login to vote

I came,
I saw,
And I turned away
(careful not to be seen).
A mocking finger
pointing at me-
Another Average Wannabe.
A personal joke
(among only a few)
not even worth
the squint of an eye
touched by humor genuine.
How Ironic!
Forever, a flicker-
Never making it
to a flame.

Related Items


The following comments are for "Irony"
by niel3995

In my head, you created an image of walking upon a significant other doing somthing they shouldnt with someone else. I wasnt even worth a glance while they did the deed. I guess I put more stock in the thing than she did. I may be far afield of the point, but I loved it none the less.

A personal joke
(among only a few)

This line was especially eye catching. Wonderful work!

Keep Scribling,


( Posted by: HeRoCoMpLeX [Member] On: September 10, 2009 )

Who doesn't get this all the way to the core. Nice job!

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: September 10, 2009 )

Add Your Comment

You Must be a member to post comments and ratings. If you are NOT already a member, signup now it only takes a few seconds!

All Fields are required

Commenting Guidelines:
  • All comments must be about the writing. Non-related comments will be deleted.
  • Flaming, derogatory or messages attacking other members well be deleted.
  • Adult/Sexual comments or messages will be deleted.
  • All subjects MUST be PG. No cursing in subjects.
  • All comments must follow the sites posting guidelines.
The purpose of commenting on Lit.Org is to help writers improve their writing. Please post constructive feedback to help the author improve their work.