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Neither my affections
Nor my wishes
have changed;
I have allowed myself to hope-
in body and soul...
If thy feelings
remain constant,
Can I reset your clock?

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The following comments are for "Clock"
by niel3995

undoing the past....
I like the form of this, I just can't seem to figure out if you direct these words, as it were, to a lover, or perhaps someone you have wronged? I can be as thick as a rock sometimes- without meaning or grasp. I like this one though.

( Posted by: pablowilliams [Member] On: September 12, 2009 )

Nice work in form and word choose but my feeling is the last line was meant to be enlightening or twist of thought. It didn't work. for me. because I can't find the thread that would relate it to the rest of the poem. Instead of an 'oh wow' moment it was a 'uh?' moment. The last line is the seed of another poem. Thanks for letting us read your work.

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: September 14, 2009 )

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