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I don't know why or how,
but I can feel your feelings,
There must be a connection some how.
Or just a trick that my mind plays to me.
Yet I think when you become sad or happy,
I can feel and share your feeling,
no matter how far away you are.
Last night when I was smoking,
I felt and heard your voice praying,
You were crying and asking God to help you
asking him to forgive you and fix me.
Maybe it is a trick my mind plays to me.
I was in my room I locked the door.
I laid down on the this cold floor.
Hugging my knees so tightly,
my eyes began to cry silently,
like clouds would rain gently.
I fell into a light sleep slowly.
I woke up by your surprising presence behind the door,
I could feel it was you, yet I remained there on the floor.
You opened the door very slowly, and sat down by my side.
I pretended to be sleep very deep,
you gently touched my arms and hands
and kissed my fingers by your soft lips,
I don't know why you did it, but you did it.
And after a few minutes you left like wind will carry the dust.

Note: Please read this poem and tell me how does it make you feel, give me your opinions, and If you think the title doesn't fit give better suggestions.
I have chose the "Your Vision" for a reason though.


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