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Look to see me on this void land!
You can't see me in the sky.
My wings are broken, I can't fly.
My heart is full of kindness oceans.
But they are chained to my emotions.
Only the sky can cry giving a meaning to the land.
Every diamond in the world could have been in my hand
If you just woke up from the dreams of unloved logic and wisdom
But now they will only gather dust and sand.
Spears of death and loneliness piercing my flesh
Because my heart has been already stolen, and can't be pierced.
A shining star of hope was in my eye.
He cried out trying to reach the dark sky.
He Loves you so much that he wants to say it every moment.
But the only answer you gave me,
was a puke that showed how much you hated love!
The truth! I screamed it to you loudly.
But you and them never even dream of it!
You shut your ears like the others proudly.
Freedom I yelled to you within this cage.
But no one heard me only the notes in my last page.


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Note: Would you please read this poem and tell me how does it make you feel?
Please give your opinion, and If you think the title doesn't fit, help me to choose a better title.

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ilgaar


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