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Could not concentrate if I wanted to
Not that I wanted to in the first place
With strange anamalistic sounds
Combined with unknown language
The confusion was too great
All functions came to a screaming halt
Nothing made sense
Even hello sounded like another galaxie's speech
Twisted into crazed noises
That had no reference to anything
That was supposed to be happening
With music I used to know playing in the background
Even that didn't help as an anchor
Only added to the chaos
With time leaping forward in strange awkward bounds
I couldn't concentrate if I wanted to

Does the wadded up paper ball or the bowling ball fall faster?

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The following comments are for "Concentration"
by thesadpoet

You gotta stay form the psychedelics - not that I would have any idea about these symptoms - but I have heard. Expand this! This could be a real 'trip.'

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: September 3, 2009 )

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