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I look in the mirror and I see you
looking at me the way you used to
with knowing eyes concealed in pain
and lips, unmoving, that spoke so plain.

I havenít forgotten how I made you cry
when I said that I lied.
But you knew that I lied
when I cried.
I havenít forgotten
that you slept with the devil
while you prayed for his soul
and how you cried
while you watched me go.

I look in the mirror and I see you
looking at me the way you used to
with knowing eyes concealed in pain
and lips, unmoving,
that understood.


2/9/09 DJCapps
http://mygardenblue.wordpress.com



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~Donna J

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Do not look back in anger, or forward in fear, but around in awareness. -James Thurber



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The following comments are for "The mirror"
by DonnaJ

The mirror
Nice. this has a lyrical quality. With a chorus this could well be a song. The second refrain caught me with this:
'that you slept with the devil
while you prayed for his soul'
For me there is nothing new in the poem - but then this shows up and the poem shines - I would like to see this element expanded - the imagery raises it from a conversation into something intriguing - a larger story.
Thank you!

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: August 26, 2009 )

@DonnaJ
I have not seen you before in my short time, (about three weeks) here at litdotorg, and that makes me sad. I loved this. I love the idea of talking to yourself as a seperate person, I've written something similar in the past. Your going to be seeing a lot of comments from me because I'm going to go back and read some of your past works. You just made my favorite author's list, thank you for sharing,

Dave

( Posted by: HeRoCoMpLeX [Member] On: August 27, 2009 )

It reminds me of someone......
Your poem is so deep than it first appear to be, only few can understand it. I feel like your poem is an answer given to my poems by someone special to me. I don't know, maybe my mind is playing tricks with me. I used to follow my mind and be a very logical person for my whole life. but when I decided to follow my heart, I looked there and found nothing but an empty vacancy.

( Posted by: ilgaar [Member] On: August 31, 2009 )





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