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With no known facilities of simplicity
the world in my face, taunting
and each breath a struggle...
I couldn't take one more step
Without some overflow
Some breakage of a damn
somewhere deep inside
My rage overboiled
with some heated words
said in righteous fury
the contained my true essence
I felt spiritual enlightenment
come upon me

Does the wadded up paper ball or the bowling ball fall faster?

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The following comments are for "Special Obscentiy Just for You!"
by thesadpoet

-for you
I liked this for the anger, frustration and the surprise ending. I'm transformed by reading it. Thanks

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: August 26, 2009 )

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