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we are music, you and i
single, solitary notes
moving along the melody of life

we are music
pure sound
reverberating in an empty universe
our voices lifted high in song
singing gibberish to heaven
knowing someone up there is singing along

we are music
at times, discordant and loud
our heart pumps our rhythm
we stamp our feet to its beat
wave our arms and we shout
as we dance

we are music
our soul sings what voices cannot carry
our lives is our song
how we live is our music
the song inside us is life

we are music, you and i
single solitary notes
in the Maestro's concerto
clanging cymbals and pounding drums
crying violins and despairing trumpets
searching voices into one chorus
transcending into a crescendo

Allelujah sings the angels
and on earth we sing along
we are the universe's song

and we are music

"...yesterday is only a dream, tomorrow, but a vision..."

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The following comments are for "we are music"
by smms905

We are music
Allelujah sings the angels
and on earth we sing along

Amen! This is uplifting and wonderful. Nice job!

How about joining in on the song challenge!

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: August 19, 2009 )

transcending into a crescendo
Thank you for sharing this, I feel refreshed having read it. Beautifully done...

( Posted by: HeRoCoMpLeX [Member] On: August 20, 2009 )

we are music
thanks for the positive feedback. i honestly don't really know how to write a song... music is a frustration. i wanted to write something a bit lighter than my usual depressed (as a friend called it) poetry...

( Posted by: smms905 [Member] On: August 20, 2009 )

there's obviously
a lot of free-floating musical inspiration around today. and as I prepare to set off on the road for a hard four days gigging, this poem made me smile, offered an uplifting personal perspective that restores- a bit- some of that wonder and naked joy at just making a noise...

if I had just one small suggestion to make, from a poetic point of view, it would be to lose the repetition of certain words, “voices”, for example, and “sing”er/ing/s. for me, these repetitions within the main body of the poem diminish the effectiveness of the deliberate, declarative repetition of “we are music” at the beginning of each. if you see what I mean? hope that’s helpful. if not, it’s only one person’s opinion, feel free to discard it without fear of offence...

you know, your piece inspired me to look up my own music poem posted many moons ago when Lit and I were both much younger. so, for the vaguely curious:

thanks for the inspiration.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: August 20, 2009 )

thanks for the suggestion AuldMiseryGuts. i really have no idea how to edit poetry, so i really appreciate it.

( Posted by: smms905 [Member] On: November 14, 2009 )

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