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Please note typos are my specialty and strong suit. I have even upon occasion copied a piece from two different files. I have multiple files of piece and tend to have more than one open at times. The files may not all b e exactly the same as some contain changes or while others contain different versions of a piece. Hopefully no such thing happened here where I copy part of one and part of another creating a new version entirely. I did review it but that does not necessarily mean much as I am the source of the error and once a mistake is made it is very easy to glance over it without notice.

When darkness comes to all
There’s nothing to beguile
As pain and torture thrive
In blindly tainted lies

Dreams can no longer smile
As ravaged tombs consume
And tender nerves exposed
While touching fears rush near

Robbing all their control
Unable to console
As demons rip the skin
Stinging tears screaming push

While lifelessly possessed
Drenched cast waste inside sits
A silent cry outlasts
the blameless flesh crashes

A failing of the soul
Deep holes remaining framed
In birthing empty wombs
A vile toil death resumes

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The following comments are for ""EMPTY WOMB""
by MTMarshall

from Lanaia Lee
WOW! A brillant piece! I read this aloud and it's perfect

( Posted by: abbey74 [Member] On: August 21, 2009 )

Empty Womb
Thank most writers I can never be completely please with a piece I write. It can always be better but at some point I have to let it go and maybe one day in the future I might visit it again. I have a few issues with this piece but I have issues every piece I write....

( Posted by: MTMarshall [Member] On: October 4, 2009 )

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