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Triggered by the common lament of a coworker's futile regrets over not picking the right numbers (i.e."Awww, what if I picked the right numbers","If I won that much money","If only I chose those two numbers,moan,whine,etc."

If all your friends
jumped off a cliff
And if they wound up
dead and stiff
If the corpses stench
made you take a deep whiff
And if it made you so sad
that you toked a big spliff
Kill your munchies with a spoon
and a jar of Jiph
Cuz now you know that 'If'
Don't make no diff.

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Beware the lollipop of mediocrity-
Lick it once and you suck forever.


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The following comments are for "Hey... you'll never know!"
by metrozol

"dead and stiff"
much as I enjoyed this, I found the meter wouldn't let me skip merrily down the lines as I would have liked, and I did trip over my tongue a bit. no matter, though, worth it, in my humbug opinion, for those first four lines alone. actually, if I was writing it the whole thing might’ve been:

If all your friends
jumped off a cliff
And if they wound up
dead and stiff
You’d know that ”if”
don’t make no diff.

but that’s just me. a pleasure to read you again.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: August 17, 2009 )

Metrozol
Nice

( Posted by: FeliciaStone [Member] On: November 7, 2012 )

Thanks, Felicia, for
calling my attention to this piece. I agree with Shannon (God, I miss him) that the meter could be better, but it's a fun treatment of an old saw. I especially like the signature:

Beware the lollipop of mediocrity-
Lick it once and you suck forever.

Is this original metrozol, Metrozol?

( Posted by: poeteye [Member] On: November 7, 2012 )





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