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Before now,
I could never dare
to look at myself.
Thought I better
not let the ghost out.
But now,
when the days end
a bit too soon,
and Iím groping my way out
half blind
the truth dawns.
Having first the frosting
then the cake,
an eternal epicurean
who lived for the moment.
A kind of reverse logic-
play before pay.
from present to past-
a scared little boy;
fear of abandonment;
death and desolation
hand in hand.
A dubious universe?
Poor parenting.



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The following comments are for "Epicurean"
by niel3995

letting the ghost out
indeed. as an effective an expression of carpe diem as I have ever read, I think. but I also read the importance of acknowledging the past and putting it in its proper place...

my apologies if I missed the point by a mile, but I am slow today. know that I enjoyed this offering regardless.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: August 17, 2009 )

Thanks!
Dear AMG,
..nice to be appreciated and I don't think you miss much..ever.
[..original intention was to draw a line between 'past insecurities' to 'chosen/mistaken way of life' to 'miserable existence'..] as you've surmised.

( Posted by: niel3995 [Member] On: August 18, 2009 )

ghost out
I held on commenting so that I could rule out any petulance of mood interfering with your work. Here's the thing for me : I really loved it until the last line. I have no doubt that it is extremally relevant to you but it trivialized the poem for me. Such high thoughts in the poem - so adroitly penned - could have been further expanded and the last line would be worthy of another examination - another poem. Just my old man mind and not so expert opinion. Still a good poem.
Thanks

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: August 18, 2009 )





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