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(Possibly my one and only TERZANELLE)


Darkened clouds gather in the skies
Something wicked is coming our way
Truth has suddenly turned to lies

Gray fog steals the light of day
blanketing our all seeing eyes
Something wicked is coming our way

Milky film crusts and quickly dries
Tears washing away all common sense
blanketing our all seeing eyes

Jaundiced corneas seeking past tense
Future is stinging, woefully burning
Tears washing away all common sense

Talk of change is sharply turning
into follow me with blinded faith
Future is stinging, woefully burning

World is spinning, stomach is churning
trying to keep the evil at bay
Future is stinging, woefully burning
Something wicked is coming our way

------
Kacee Huggs


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The following comments are for "SOMETHING WICKED"
by Nitz Kitty

Kacee
Indeed.

Good to experience your voice again..

Peaceful dreams,
Robert William

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: August 10, 2009 )

Bobby
None are so blind as those who refuse to see...I thought I'd give myself a challenge...I like to do that every once in awhile...can't let the mind go stagnant..This was a tuffy...

Thanks for commenting...

( Posted by: nitz kitty [Member] On: August 10, 2009 )

@ Kacee
It's funny I came across this piece this morning. On twitter, I put up a Yoruba proverb that fits in with this: In the land of the blind, and one-eyed man is king.

Those who refuse to see the truth are led easily by one with limited vision.

We really need to stand back and see the bigger picture, all of us.

Thanks for writing this. As always, everything you write makes me think . . . and just so you know . . . it hurts!

Ochani

( Posted by: OchaniLele [Member] On: August 10, 2009 )

Stuart
Thanks for the rating..Glad I could get you thinking...Yes, the truth does hurt at times...I have a hard time with forgiveness...I know I must forgive to be forgiven ...I would ask God," Do I have to?" The answer was always "YES" In my heart I knew it to be true...Better to have my EGO bruised than ulcers in my belly...I guess we have to hurt first so we can heal...Thanks for reading and commenting ...Kacee

( Posted by: nitz kitty [Member] On: August 10, 2009 )

Wicked
Wow...whatever the demon was I pray for you. I liked the repitition of lines throught the stanzas. Ominous and chilling. good work.

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: August 10, 2009 )

jonpenny
For we are not wrestling against flesh and blood but against the spirit forces of wickedness in the heavenly sphere...Some of them walk among us...Be afraid, very afraid...Keep praying Jon...Thanks for reading and commenting...Kacee

( Posted by: nitz kitty [Member] On: August 10, 2009 )

by the pricking of my thumbs...
Kacee! so very glad to read you again, and to see you still trying new things. but this is more than just an exercise, and as I read this I feel the full force of the foreboding of one- indeed all- spiritually imperilled, and I felt a ghost walk over my grave...
t
his poem could read of personal battles fought, but it also resonates in the wider world where the next fresh horror is just around the corner, or an old wickedness is busy repeating itself for the umpteenth time...

a good camp-fire sensibility combined with a chilling look at moral decay.

( Posted by: AuldMiseryGuts [Member] On: August 11, 2009 )

Shannon
You read me so well...You always get it...Sad and scary at the same time...If you don't learn from History ...You are doomed to repeat it...and DOOMED is the word...I need to come up with something funny...I'm bumming myself out...Kacee

( Posted by: nitz kitty [Member] On: August 11, 2009 )

Wicked...
Kacee, like Shannon has said, IT IS INDEED GREAT to read you again;-) This is truly wicked writing, as in good the slang term for wicked good writing. I like it;-)

Hope your health is good, best wishes and many blessings to you and your family.

Karma

( Posted by: TheRealKarmaTseringLhamo [Member] On: August 11, 2009 )

comment
Very well done! Being a dark poet myself, I could really relate

( Posted by: abbey74 [Member] On: August 11, 2009 )

Lena
Thanks for checking out my Terzanelle...I've been doing good..hemoglobin levels have been between 13.8 and 14...Thank God...

Hope you are doing well also...Kacee

( Posted by: nitz kitty [Member] On: August 11, 2009 )

abbey 74
Ah yes Mary,
Our poetry is somewhat alike...My CONFESSIONS OF A PROSTITUTE and SEARCHING FOR LOVE are my darkest...I gravitate toward the UNSOLVED murders...Sometimes I must tell of dark spirits, the ones we must fight in our every day lives...I very often scare myself...thanks for reading and commenting...Kacee

( Posted by: nitz kitty [Member] On: August 11, 2009 )

Kacee's ill winds!
Kacee...This was great...I thought only us old people paid attention to the prophecies any more!

If this doesn't send a chill up everyone's spine, nothing will. I admire your courage in tackling the Terzanelle...you're braver than I my friend.

So glad you're feeling better!

Love,
Bea

( Posted by: Beatrice Boyle [Member] On: August 12, 2009 )

Bea
I guess you have to graduate from The School Of Hard Knocks to be able to see things coming...Us old gals have been through alot...We try to tell the youngsters but they want to learn by making their own mistakes...When we get knocked down...We keep getting back up... Thanks for reading and commenting...Kacee

( Posted by: Nitz kitty [Member] On: August 12, 2009 )

~Superstitious/~
I gave you a nine only because I don't like how right you are. Giving you a ten, I felt, may make my fears into reality. I am a paranoid superstitionist.
OCD! LOL! ADHD!
LMOA! FAADQSSOOMA!

( Posted by: TheTesticularPrancer [Member] On: August 14, 2009 )

TTP
Thank you for the hefty rating...I must admit I have a gift (or is it a curse?) You can't close your eyes to it...It is coming fast...Kacee

( Posted by: nitz kitty [Member] On: August 15, 2009 )

Chris
Thanks for reading and the great rate...Kacee

( Posted by: nitz kitty [Member] On: August 15, 2009 )





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