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When it gets worse
the ten go first.
The ten gophers
reverse what hurts.

Written in verse
it always works.
The ten gophers
disperse the curse.

They will emerge
erasers of scourge.
Not ten goat herds
match ten gophers.

The hens and worms
all know the terms.
When it gets worse
the ten go first.

Reverend AntinormalitÓ

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The following comments are for "The Ten Go First"
by TheTesticularPrancer

"The Ten"...
I preferred when read from bottom up, but that's just me.

Robert William

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: July 24, 2009 )

You are absolutely right! Whoa. Wish I had more time today. Thank you for seeing it.

( Posted by: thetesticularprancer [Member] On: July 24, 2009 )

Most excellent Reverend;-)
I like it whether read from top or down, either way it reads OK;-)


( Posted by: TheRealKarmaTseringLhamo [Member] On: July 25, 2009 )

the ten go first
Probably one of my favorites I've ever seen you write.

"Not ten goat herds
match ten gophers"
Pretty brilliant!

I'm not the best interpreter of metaphors, but this one speaks.

( Posted by: RHJesus [Member] On: July 27, 2009 )

hens and goats
When the pen hits the hens
where the goat herds disperse
then this gets nothing worse
than a first and that's a ten.
I don't know, Rev, I think its pretty good as it is. ;)

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: July 27, 2009 )

The Pen Hits the Hens!
Hahahaa! Well, I sure appreciate that Brother Ken. Thank you. You made me laugh. Thank you too, Jesus. I know that if there IS any meaning to be gleaned from such nonsense it could certainly be understood by you, Lord.

( Posted by: thetesticularprancer [Member] On: July 27, 2009 )

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