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If I fall, 
In the heat of battle 
Will you be there? 
Ready with care and kiss 
And your tender touch 
That I will dearly miss 
 
If I rise again, 
Will you stay by my side? 
Or float like a tide 
Sweeping from high to low 
And forget me, 
With nothing left to show 
 
If I break, 
My tears flowing forth 
A horrendous torrent of purity 
Will you turn away? 
Leave me in sorrow 
Or would you rather stay? 
 
If I fall, 
To my humble knees 
Will you be there? 
Lift me up with heart 
Support me on your arms 
Or would you just depart? 
 
If I fall 
If I rise 
If I break 
If I fight 
Say you will always be there 
With me till the end of time


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The following comments are for "If I Fall"
by False Dawn

Wonderful
This flows well and portrays such vulnerability that at first read, it took my breath away. So much emotion emits from this piece -- I just can't say enough it is awesome!!

( Posted by: dolphingurrl [Member] On: August 3, 2003 )

Really?
lol, and I've always classed it as one of my worse poems :D

( Posted by: False Dawn [Member] On: August 3, 2003 )

Like it
It may not be your best piece but neither is this your worst piece. I agree on the vulnerability with dolphinggurl and I do liek thsi poem.

( Posted by: one.true.lady.uk [Member] On: August 5, 2003 )

random reading
and I came across this. I like it very much- as previously said- the vulnerability is pronounced well. good write

( Posted by: Cynical_Scribe [Member] On: July 12, 2004 )





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