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They say the mirrior reflects
the Soul

But why is it that my reflection
is Shattered

Pieces drift out of sight
forever Gone

Is it to say that my soul
is Wicked
and Hell-Bent

Yet, a hell-bent sould is still
a Soul

Perhaps dark and bloody....but
still Intact

So I guess my soul is vanishing
away Forever

What a pity, I rather like the
useless Thing

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The following comments are for "Shattered Reflection"
by Kayame

When I first read this I took it as a well written and clever joke - and didn't give it much thouht. Then I read it a few moe times and realized that I liked it. I liked it because there is a lot available here. The whole idea that someone would ponder a soul then call it useless is the fodder of a larger work. It is my humble opinion that you go back and give us an expanded version of this, where the meat is in the content and the punchline becomes ironically profound.
Thanks for a good read.

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: June 10, 2009 )

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