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You smiled when you said your wife left you
Because that freed you up now to play
I didn't see how it really much mattered
By agreement she didn't stand in the way

Since you neither one could stand the other
It seemed obvious and long overdue
Seeing as how half the town fucked her
And the other half was fucking you

With pride you spoke of your gas-jockey
Your first pick-up as a free man
Nonchalantly you said she ignored you
Which I really could not understand

Then she started to pay some attention
After how many phone calls you made
So you went out and redid her bedroom
It's neat how some people are paid

So she left you for some nameless penis
And you were broken at first and quite sad
But it lead to the realization
That your substance use had got out of hand

You quit with the dope and the liquor
I couldn't believe how you sounded upbeat
The grass you said simply depressed you
And you implied that it did so to me

Then around Christmas she came back
- Her name to me still an unknown -
Her kids and yours would comingle
And you'd treat hers like they were your own

The next month you called me elated
Life was you said never this good
I thought that she sounded quite loathesome
But I kept quiet 'cause I thought that I should

You were happy and nothing else matters
A friend lets his friend enjoy
Whatever pleasure he can wring out of life
And a word can a friendship destroy

Then a month passed and I hadn't called you
To be fair though you didn't call me
We both of us have uninteresting lives
But what lives we have keep us both busy

I went into work one cold morning
Not pathetic fallacy it's just where I live
And another friend of yours told me
You'd taken the last breath this life had to give

Four days you'd decayed in your bedroom
and no one had noticed the loss
Most of us thought it was suicide
You'd decided to lay down your cross

But me I didn't quite buy that
Although you'd just turned 42
Even depressed you were happy
Felo-de-se just didn't ring true

When the coroner butcher got finished
He announced that your heart failed you
When I heard that I thought "I was right...
Shit I'm just six years younger than you"


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The following comments are for "To Mike - So I Guess You're Dead - Profanity Warning"
by CyanideEyes

So I Guess You're Dead
I really like this .... thank you.....I think I'm back with my head on here.... I was over at the Oddville Press and I think my head got fried...This is the first thing I have read since the crap I've been reading over there that sounds like poetry......thank you I really thought I lost my mind and was being punished.... Every poem I have read over there sounds as if there's a Bukowski conspiracy..and there taking over the world of poetry turning it to pure poop...

I like the rhythm. Very nice..And I love the humor... good use of words. Nicely presented... ...It is clear and just has such a nice feel to it... You have no idea how happy I am reading this....

I would also love to know how you can use the word fuck??? I write lyrics and some contain that word as well as others of that nature ... They're not over flowing in them but I really don't like being censored. I use certain words for effect etc..... I'm new to both sites so I really don't know how all this really works..I already have to edit one of my posts because their were errors when I did it and omitted about six lines as well as a couple of other screw ups with it...I copied it from a file i copies wrong from another file. I sounds confusing. Okay I'm rambling...I just got so excited to read real poem....Sorry...

Again thank you for the poem and for giving me back my sanity. Excuse my typing errors ...It's not my strong suit...

Fondly,
Miriam

( Posted by: MTMarshall [Member] On: June 11, 2009 )

@ Miriam
I'm not familiar with Oddville Press (and truly, I really don't like dissing other writer's sites at all -- there's room for everyone on the internet!), but I am glad you found your way back here.

We seem to have an incredible array of talented writers on litdotorg, and if you get bored with current offerings, you can go through random reader and find TONS of incredible voices from lit's past.

Stay around and write awhile!

Ochani

( Posted by: OchaniLele [Member] On: June 11, 2009 )

PS Miriam
When it comes to the use of profanity on litdotorg, I'm not against it if it has artistic value. Those who know me know I'm not prudish by any means.

All I ask is that no one use any cursing in the subject line; and if the piece does contain profanity in the body of the text, give fair warning such as Cyanide Eyes did.

Other than that, those are the rules! If I ever have a problem with a piece, I'll PM the author directly and see if we can reach a happy medium.

Ochani

( Posted by: OchaniLele [Member] On: June 11, 2009 )

post
You can remove this entirely and I will post another removing any mention what you consider "dissing" or you can remove those portions that make mention to it. I have no clue how this is handled here.......

Fondly,
Miriam

( Posted by: MTMarshall [Member] On: June 13, 2009 )

A Story
I love poems that tell a story. This was fantastic, the sarcasm, the honesty, and the tone was so close to reality. I enjoyed reading this and it takes a lot to keep my attention!

( Posted by: woalook100 [Member] On: June 19, 2009 )

@MTMarshall
Miriam:

It's okay -- no editing needed. I don't mind mention of other websites on the pages of litdotorg, but it just makes me uncomfortable when someone offers even a slightly negative comment about another writer's site.

I'll tell you why: I'm not registered or involved with any of the other writers' sites (I don't have the time for it!), but the online writing community is small, and negative comments on any scale seem to start an endless series of emails to my private mailbox complaining . . . it's just too much for me to handle.

No harm, no foul. I'm just happy to have you back here among our ranks. You're work is very fresh!

Ochani

( Posted by: OchaniLele [Member] On: June 20, 2009 )





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