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In an immediately recent rant I detailed what happened to this poor unfortunate work in it's first incarnation. This is the second - and hopefully last - attempt at bringing it to mingin fruition

At night the city comes on like a lover
I wrote that line that Autumn morn
When you one-upped me with your tongue
And kissed me outside of your door

A kiss that I had long dreamed of
A kiss that I never took
I stood stupid in lengthy goodbyes
Because your refusal I just couldn't brook

There was nothing that I really wanted
Except for the dew of your lips
And to feel your breasts pressed against me
My hands on the curve of your hips

So seeing that I was a coward
You stepped close you grabbed me and then
you answered my prayers in a heartbeat
Your breath in my mouth the amen

When I left you I skipped down your street Jen
Yes I skipped I say here with no shame
I plucked at the leaves of the September trees
A small sacrifice made in your name

And then came unbidden the poem
Though I can't say it was written by me
Line upon line it came from the air
Like Eros' benedictory

Now a dozen years past I remember
That morning that kiss and that line
The poem's body like yours quickly left me
And the memories are all that are mine

I really can't say that I'm bitter at you
That's one of the blessings of time
And the only thing of value I lost
Is all that followed that line

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The following comments are for "To Jen - At Night The City Comes On Like a Lover"
by CyanideEyes

just like a lover
Okay! I really really like this one. Great word choices, great story, adroitly penned, that will hit everyone at some level

'And then came unbidden the poem
Though I can't say it was written by me
Line upon line it came from the air
Like Eros' benedictory'
My favorite.

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: June 10, 2009 )

Thanks Jon
I'm glad it was at least somewhat relatable.

I agree with you about And then came unbidden the poem.... I think that's the best bit too.

( Posted by: cyanideeyes [Member] On: June 10, 2009 )

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