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I want to write of a more natural way...
so as not to orphan dialog but yet convey
an articulate expression
on human aggression...
of an organism
with mechanisms
that manufacture euphemisms
in order to make humane,
even judicially sustain,
the most heinous acts of human oppression.

These are the keys to all the anthems
composed with the prose of countless poems
and we dance to the songs of unfurled emblems,
of christians and jews and of dangerous moslems.

At first we thirst for theorems
that elucidate the stratagems
which then ordain the subsystems
of all these hierarchical,
networks of modems
and cameras
that capture us
from Big Brother's totems.

And the military force,
is because of the wars
which, of course,
are the source
of all of our problems.
We've got problems, alright -
we seem to love to fight.
And we're taught that any plight
is the right of the right.
So why do they conquer, who champion God's love,
who drink from the river he pours from above?

Because the spiritual leaders
manage the ritual feeders.
And in the Hour of Power
they'll sit in their pews,
faces tuned to the tower
for the preaching of the news.
For this is how they get their illegitimate paws
on the cash they stash to establish the laws
But their law ordains
by the way it constrains
what's in the brains
of the scriptural breeders.

The winds of doctrine here
of a western atmosphere
will permeate
and devastate
all those who adhere
to the simple laws of nature.

For should anyone adventure
to posit conjecture
that an endless war on terror
is in fact a war on culture...
Well, they'll surely feel
That terror is real
When, served long and thick,
democracy's prick
makes its way slowly
into all that is holy
then takes off with what it can steal

But the natural way
is to care for your brother
like you would of yourself
like you should of your mother
After the tribulations
and then after all the trails
there comes a more peaceful time.
Beyond justifications
both useless and worthwhile
long past judgement and crime.

I speak of when touching replaces the vote
when a nod legislates consent,
when the children i see
will one day be free
from the kings they call "President"
Their bark, as we've said
to the neighbors we dread,
is worse than its bureaucratic bite
so we swallow their policies
through fear-strangled throat,
consuming all of them, left and right

The money today that coins our living,
those trinkets with which we establish our change
will give way to a more sustainable giving
when we're willing to live on the love we exchange.
And the sun will yet rise in a natural way
on the beggars and bankers alike.
We'll love the unknown on that glorious day
and embrace what we once disliked

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The following comments are for "A More Natural Way"
by Tamir

Natural way
Wow! This amazes me. I reacted to this with a thick silence. 'Love each other' Seems such a simple rule but you use words, adroitly, to show us how we use words to do everything but. We need words to justify terrible actions. We need words to be vicious and twisted. We don't need words to be kind but we do need words from sensitive poets to tell us to behave ourselves.
'I know what to do I just don't do it.' as the Apostle Paul said.
Thanks so much for the well written reminder.

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: May 28, 2009 )

... but not all things are profitable
like this poem, for example :), about which your praise goes too far. When i read it i see how poorly it is written and yet i have set it down as is. It would by my honor if someone could fix it for its own sake. I accept the undeserved rating with a blush, but thanks so much, jonpenny, for drudging through it to find its core. peace and love.

( Posted by: Tamir [Member] On: May 28, 2009 )

Not all things
Yes. You could prune it down for economy. You could sharpen it and follow every rule you have ever learned. Or you could leave it be for it's own sake. It is long and work to read, but I still say worthy for the effort. I would not tell you what could be done - for this one, it would have to be you who does that work. Some poems are unique to the poet and stand or fall on there own. I believe this is one. If you should decide to rework it, and maybe you should - for it is your voice, I would be honored to stand in line to read it.
Bless you!

( Posted by: jonpenny [Member] On: May 28, 2009 )

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