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I put my index fingers in my ear, push hard, block out the negative rant.
Uncomfortable, not being allowed to leave and settle my thoughts.
Hum, I Hum and breathe to wish she would stop and go away.
Avoid speaking to extinguish the fire.
I am alone and composed.

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The following comments are for "Lonely Moment"
by NucleusFire

Lonely Moment
I can't truly say that I liked it much but that's mostly a matter of taste. From "uncomfortable" to "fire" could use some tweaking though.

The last line got me. I like the certainty and simplicity of it. It's a good line and it does a good job of tying up the whole.

( Posted by: CyanideEyes [Member] On: May 16, 2009 )

Well think of the emotion that is behind a writing that is non fiction. this is to a perfect match what escalated in my head and reality. I shared with complete honesty.

( Posted by: NucleusFire [Member] On: May 24, 2009 )

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