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She's more than I can handle.
Apparently,
as I cant be contained when she's close.
When there's no being real,
how could she feel entertained?

there's a sobering ringing in the ears,
She needs higher energies
I'm bringing her down,
But she hasn't tried to lift me up.

My senses cant be quieted.
Her smell wont leave me.
the taste grows annoying.
my feeling. feels stale.

Its more constant than breathing
the thought of her movement.
she articulates my longing
With simple steps.

She is the elements,
She's probably gravity..
keeping me from rising,
unrelenting in her invisible presence.


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The following comments are for "LADY LADY"
by DEMONeyesBLUE

your poem was good.
i was looking around the poems and stumbled across this one. i really liked it. thanks for posting it.

j.jd.

( Posted by: johnjohndoe [Member] On: May 13, 2009 )





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